Harry Potter and the Cracked Reservoir

is this story ever going to be finished or is it abandoned?

im just wondering if this story was going to be continued? i first read it at FF.net and just reread it yesterday and i would love to know if there was going to be more. Anyway just wondering, it is a great story.

Good start. I love the Phoenix treats idea... and especially the indgredients.

Interesting start.

gunny

When I read this, I kept thinking of barbeque sauce... I'll have the Boy-Who-Lived platter with vinegar sauce and slaw, with a side of hush puppies, please :)

An interesting beginning enlivened by Phoenix treats - which were a wonderful touch.

A good start!

-selenepotter

Great chapter! I can't wait to read the next!

-SpiderLily

Sounds like a fun story. I can't wait to read more.

This chapter seemed a little rushed, but I really did like your characterization of Dumbledore. Most fanfics out there seem to make Dumbledore some sort of god, but you gave him a real human side. Good start.

I'm enjoying the story. There are some wording changes that could improve it further:

The past seven hours had been spent restlessly on the bed, his insides attempting to be barbequed by the explosion of power that an attempted ritual by his number one enemy. For a fifteen-year-old boy, Harry Potter had a long list of enemies, each believing to be his arch nemesis.

I'd suggest some minor wording fixes here. This way, it sounds as if his insides are actually "attempting to be barbequed". And that certainly isn't the case!

In the second sentence, I'd suggest "each one believing himself or herself to be Harry's arch nemesis"

Wait just a minute now! I went ter the next chapter, expectin' to find Albus in the kitchen with them Dursleys, only ter find Harry in the heads office. Now, don't get me wrong, I liked the first chapter, and the story, but I was really hopin' you were gonna let Albus tear Vernon a new one (so ter speak).

As appealing as that image is, I didn't write it. Dumbledore 'tearing them a new one' is not in store. Dumbledore, as a character is quite calm until you get him riled, in which case he is powerful and manacing but not prone to tearing into people. Now please keep reading, as...

<MINOR SPOILER!>

.~:Look away:~. (Whispers) Hermione does turn seventeen September 19th of her sixth year. (Wink)

I like it. It looks like a good beginning to a great story. Please continue if that was your intention. I look forward to more.
pms

Just came across your story. I like the dream scene and the fact that Dumbledor replied so quickly. I may not review every chapther but will leave one whenever possible. Sorry it interfears with the flow of the story. Love ot so far.

Ch.1 - - A very interesting start. Basically a teaser.

As an author I dislike it when reader say they want you to update quickly. So I won't...

I value cleverness highly, and this was very clever:

“Phoenix treats. Made from cinnamon, jalapenos and wasabi,” the Headmaster said, answering the unasked question on Harry’s face. “Fawkes just loves them.”

Great start!

Hey, so this story is posted elsewhere? ff.net maybe? looks interesting i wanted to continue reading it

Yes, It was posted at FF.n until they deleted me for exceeding my 'M' rating. Don't know how I did it, but someone must have decided that I offended them and complained, either that or a sick joke to get a bunch of stories deleted. I am on other sites, but this site will be the one to receive the re-writen/re-edited, Beta'd version...you know, "New and Improved!"

If you search for my story, you may find it more complete elsewhere, but I won't be updating elsewhere until I finish the re-do.

I have been following this fic over at ff.net before it got deleted. I hope you can get it all up soon over here at ffa.net.

I just noticed one thing wrong. The chapters are sometimes too short with endings that seem to be too abrupt. I recently caught up to the latest chapter which were saved on my pc. I think they were the last 10 chapters you posted on ff.net. The plot didn't seem to progress much and the chapters seemed to end up short. If possible, can you consider combining chapters to an appropriate length at which point they cover an adequate portion of the overall plot?

Don't think of this as a flame or any such thing. This is a honest suggestion for you.

Thanks for the comment. You may be right. I'll try to remember that when I get to re-writing/re-editing the later chapters. Bobmin said something like that when he reviewed on FF.n, only he advocated cutting some things.</P>
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Thanks for reviewing.

hehe lol cool

Welcome!!!

At least here you won't have to worry about getting booted off. :)

I got som'att to say ter ya...Welcome aboard! Are ya just teasin' us with this little chapter? I mean, its a good chapter an' all, it just seems a might..shortish. Course, I'm not even sure if thats a real word, but maybe yer get me meanin' anyhow.