Harry Potter and the Cracked Reservoir

Just a quick note to let you know I'm thoroughly enjoying your story..but I did notice a small mistake. Hermione's 17th birthday fell on a Thursday, not a Tuesday.Apart from that,I really can't find much to fault about. I just wish it wasn't quite so long between updates! Keep up the good work.

How do you figure?  What I mean is; where do you get the information that Hermione's 17th birthday was on a Thursday?  Was it days specific to dates I gave in the story and tracking it on a calendar, or was it canon from book six?  If it was from book six, consider this AU from book six and seven, as that chapter was written before HBP was released.  Actually, consider the whole story only paying canon heed through book five.

If the mistake was evidenced by dates tied to specific days in my story, please let me know where and I will attempt to fix it.  If the mistake was evidenced by canon book six or seven, or comments by JKR or HP-Lexicon entries, please excuse the mistake and chalk it up to me doing my best to interpret canon due to JKR's poor grasp of math and the calendar.

Thank you for taking the time to review.  Offering corrections for mistakes the author makes helps to improve the story for later readers.

Mike (MoA)

“And you may, if you wish,” the Headmaster said, “stop by the hospital wing and check on Harry on your way to the tower.”

LOL! Loved Dumbles' way of breaking the news.

Nice one.

gunny

Another great chapter, I love the story so far... I love this part (‘He should learn to wear earplugs to bed,’ Harry added silently.) I thought it to be real funny... keep up the great work.

Ah, I love it. Hermione is quite impressive if she can keep going for two hours straight. And I guess Bill and Charlie really did teach Ginny how to deliver a punch.

I'd bawl Harry out for overheating himself, but Ginny did a better job already. I liked the way you did that part.

That final line was hilarious. Great chapter.

Yeah for Hermione & Ginny & The Grangers! I'm so glad Ginny punched Dudley. Serves him right. Of course Harry over did it again! Some times he needs a witness to his "stuff" to protect him from himself! Ginny will see to that I'm sure. Thanks for writing such an entertaining chapter. pms

I especially liked the last line.

This was one of the better 'tell-off-the-Dursleys' I have ever read.

And the information Harry assimilated while asleep in the infirmary was a very clever way to portray this.

I highly value 'clever.'

Thank you.  That means a lot.  I had to contend with a laziness on my part, not wanting to come up with and write out an entire block of Hermione's railings, and an opinion that if it got too long, it would be boring.  I also did not believe that Hermione would do anything that I have seen before like changing them into pigs and hipos.  That just doesn't fit her personality, at least not the Hermione I wanted to write.

good chapter update soon

oh, and while we're at it, thank you SO much for taking liberal advantage of the reply-to-review feature this site has to offer. It really makes it far more worthwhile to leave further reviews when I know they're not being ignored. ;)

okay enough praise - don't want you to get too psyched and think it's alright to put off posting the next chapter...! Thanks again.

‘He should learn to wear earplugs to bed,’ Harry added silently .. Now, what i wouldn't give to see the scene were he wasn't as silent as he tought.. God that would have been fun.. hehe.. I don't think i ever review your chapters, aldo i've been reading it for a while now, but never did review. Just lasy i guess.. but i do love the story..

See ya, gotta go back to work..
P.

Thank you for your review and for reading, even when you didn't review.  Welcome to the vocal minority.

I like the last part!

:)

He should learn to wear earplugs eh? I am wondering slightly if the way harry reached the hospital was one of those holdover controls you wouldn't reveal to me, or if he was concious enough to transport himself?

Oh! and why a obsidian dragon?

Maybe.  Every system should have some safety features.  Harry was unconcious before he hit the ground.

An obsidian dragon as a homemade gift.  Nothing plot-ish.

or maybe you didnt forget... i just got it (the alert that is)

lol awesome!!!!

heh earplugs.... so how come he didnt feel dehydrated? anyhow you forgot to send the email alert!

Harry was distracted and he didn't think about it.  If it were as easy as feeling dehydrated when you are busy, no one would ever reach heat exhaustion.  I, myself, have felt close to heat exhaustion.  I have had the chills in 110 degree heat.  Not good.

Lovely chapter - good times! Only one small nit to pick:

...do not like bully’s,” Ginny said...
plural of "bully" is "bullies" - apostrophe's are never used to make thing's plural.

Again, fun chapter. This story is a great read. Thanks so much for posting regularly!!

Thanks, I changed it.  That is a bad habit of mine.  The hard part is catching it on the re-write.  It is too easy to read past when you were the one who wrote it the first time.  I have soem good betas but I can't expect everything from them.  In the end, it is my story and my fault.  This site makes it so easy to edit, that I just do it when it is pointed out.

I will post each chapter as I get it ready, up to once a day (occasionally I will get ahead of myself and have several days posts saved up ready to go.)

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

A most awesome chapter ... I loved Hermione's birthday celebration. Ginny giving Harry whatfor as he lay in the hospital wing was great. But I especially enjoyed the last line ... But I don't think wearing earplugs to bed will solve the problem unless he can stay out of trouble ... then the earplugs would be a moot point.

Keep up the good work

'Mione

Thank you.  I thought, when I read your previous reviews that you would like this chapter.

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

Great chapter. :)