ichtys posted a comment on Wednesday 15th November 2006 12:32am for Chapter 1

Very god start. I look forward to reading the next chapter. The referance to the dog that Ron couldn't keep, because he belonged to a different family worked well. I don't know if Princess-Ginny isn't a bit too much, I can't picture Arthur and Molly raising her that way. Anyway, good start, and I think the way Harry and Ginny met was the best possible. I think their letters were a bit too mature, the words seemed complicated for a 9-year old boy.
regards Ichtys

Kinsfire posted a comment on Wednesday 15th November 2006 12:23am for Chapter 1

And thus we see why children die all the time from abuse...

"I didn't think it could be that bad."

It's one of the reasons that I grew to HATE Dumbledore over the course of the books, and Molly's not my favourite either.

This is a good start, but I expect that the Weasleys will see the boy and insist that he go back, especially when Dumbledore gets word. He stated in canon that the protections were key - even Harry's safety was secondary.

I look forward to seeing where you go with this.

Musings of Apathy replied:

Thanks Keith.   I look forward to surprising you.

Mike (MoA)

knightsbridge posted a comment on Wednesday 15th November 2006 12:18am for Chapter 1

I know this is a one-shot, but I wish you would continue with this. I think you mentioned that it was the story of Harry and Ginny growing up togther, and that would be a brilliant read...AU to be sure, but another vision on the HP/GW story would be something different and interesting, to say the least. Especially when Molley and Arthur fing who they have in their house!

MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Wednesday 15th November 2006 12:09am for Chapter 1

Great chapter, I can see her mom or dad walking in, in the morning and seeing them sleeping togather. I wonder if the alarms in Dumbldores office going off as soon as he left. You have to update soon.

MPF

Sibling Creature posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 11:27pm for Chapter 1

*smiles* I've got to say I'm impressed. I love the way this chapter plays out, its a very promising start to the story.

I'd have to agree with Rebel Goddess that some of their vocabulary seems a little advanced. I also noticed that at the beginning of Ginny's first letter she twice refers to Errol as 'her'.

Good luck with the challenge in any case. Of course I have my own reasons for wanting you to be able to complete it... I want the rest of the story ASAP! ;-)

Musings of Apathy replied:

Thank you.   The probelms are a result of a lack of beta process.   It will be remedied in December or January.

tess posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 10:33pm for Chapter 1

love the story i can't wait for the next chapter

Tanydwr posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 10:03pm for Chapter 1

Sweet story. I can't wait to read more.
I look forward to the Weasleys' reactions, and Dumbledore - will he turn up, after discovering that Harry isn't at 'home'? How will he react to the Dursleys' abuse? I know the Weasleys will be horrified, uanble to understand how anyone can do that to a child, and wishing they had listened to Ginny's pleas.
I can't wait to see Ron's reaction. I think he'd like a friend, since he doesn't really have one (which is probably the reason for 'adopting' the dog). Harry could easily be both Ginny and Ron's friend.
Keep up the excellent work.
Lol, Tanydwr

Bernd Jacobitz posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 10:02pm for Chapter 1

Ah, the tension, I can't stand it.
Good work so far. Keep 'em comming.

lockethegoon posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 9:47pm for Chapter 1

Really good story, but now you've created a problem, I now must wait for another story to be finished, hitting refresh on my computer until it works.
Constructive criticism, watch your grammar sometimes you used past and future tense in the same sentence.

Sean Dillon posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 9:36pm for Chapter 1

Awww. How sweet.

clayton day posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 9:31pm for Chapter 1

Oh yes a great start. I can't wait until Mrs. Weasley finds out the stuffed dragon has been replaced by a boy. Let alone the reaction of Mr. Weasley when he realizes his only daughter spent the night in bed with "A BOY". You've bitten off a difficult chunk of a story and I wish you all the best. Rest assured I will be reading this and awaiting updates with zero patience.

Chrispy posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 9:29pm for Chapter 1

Interesting.

Tammy posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 9:20pm for Chapter 1

Very good! Update son!

Honor posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 9:03pm for Chapter 1

Wow, I really like this. In it's own way, its actually a better set-up than Luna's Hubby had, although that one worked because it was Luna involved. Really enjoyed this chapter. More please! =^_^=

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 8:41pm for Chapter 1

Now this one sounds right promising, with the chance of Harry getting out from his "relatives" and near Ginny rather earlier than in canon. I can see lots of possibilities here.

Bravo!!

happyreader posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 8:18pm for Chapter 1

That was fun,,,, cant wait to see what comes next.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 7:52pm for Chapter 1

Poor Harry! Nice beginning though. My only, very minor, criticism is that Harry's letter used some words that I think not even 11-year-old Harry knew. Otherwise excellent story. More please. I really like the idea of this.

Riven posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 7:36pm for Chapter 1

interesting, i look foward to seeing where this is going, please update soon

Alex Mcpherson posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 7:32pm for Chapter 1

reading that... my heart hurts. not literally but, well you know when you get a sinking feeling? that.
I just can't read bits of stories about bullies. the younger the age and the more the bullies can get away with, and the worse the acts they do, the worse the feeling.
I can read basicly descriptive horror stories where the story is not for kids due to say, description of rape, and then the gory battle scenes and when a character is shunned (as young as 15) for no good reason without getting all worked up,

I guess thats because I was a victim of bullying, so know the feeling quite well.I literally don't have friends although, unlike with Harry, instead of it because everyone was afraid to be my friend, it was because no one liked me at all. Anyone who did, I kept at arms length anyway.people online know me better then people who have known me all my life.
it gutrenders me, these stories, since they are realistic in the descriptions of children.
Children can be kind. but for every kind child, there is a cruel child.for every spoiled brat, there is a overwhelmingly deserving of that spoiling, yet completely hated, child.

Kail Ceannai posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 7:14pm for Chapter 1

Fabulous. You've captured the world of a child quite well!