By Musings of Apathy
Reviews
christine posted a comment on Sunday 26th November 2006 3:49am
oh my god, i can`t wait for the next one! Its very exciting. I just love Harry and ginny.
Faith1 posted a comment on Sunday 26th November 2006 1:38am
AWWW!! I hope that Pickrake becomes a big part and stands up to Bumbles... :D!
Kail Ceannai posted a comment on Saturday 25th November 2006 6:19pm
Another excellent story. It's starting to lean a bit towards "Luna's Hubby," yet maintain it's own interesting threads.
Gotta love those Goblins. They're always useful =)
ttestagr posted a comment on Saturday 25th November 2006 4:39pm
Great idea, and one that isn't very common. I had thought of something similar, with Harry ending up with the Weasley's as a child. This though is much better, with Ginny keeping him there secretly adding much more depth and intrigue to the story.
Quite a few people already commented on Dumbledore's reaction when he learned Harry was missing, and I agree that it will be severe. I suggest avoiding the 'he goes crazy looking for him and then tries his hardest to force him to live with the Dursley's again though' route though. It's something he might do, but its overused to the extreme. I'd suggest taking him in a direction where he thinks that he failed with his wards and dark wizards are responsible. From there you can have him actually start to use the considerable influence that he had in the beginning of the story and not waste it like he did in canon. The idea of Dumbledore making the lives of Voldemort's former supporters hell instead of Harry is something that appeals to me.
Other than that, keep on writing and I'll keep reading.
LittleTom45 posted a comment on Saturday 25th November 2006 2:21pm
This is a fine story. I like the way you write from a child’s point of view. As adults we tend to forget that a child is so innocent and the world around them is still a great mystery. Yet they comprehend more than we sometimes believe. I was hard reading the abuse incurred on Harry. To know that fact there are people who are so cruel to kids is quite sad. Your writing is good and simple although some of the words used by Harry and Ginny seem to be above their vocabulary. Even with that, I still enjoy the story. I look forward to your next chapter.
goddessa39 posted a comment on Saturday 25th November 2006 6:17am
LOL. Meddlesome goblin. I don't really see Harry staying with them hidden very long though. Continue!
dave84768768 posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 12:04pm
Tres cute. Play marriage (that turns out to be real) comming soon I trust?
No Idea Why I Smile posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 10:29am
forgot some things...
like how you brought in the Cloak and Galaxy pendant...those should be interesting..
the way you described Ginny and Harry is very good, and pretty close to canon.
the rings, oh the rings...i can just imagine what the goblin was thinking when he sent those...probably hoping for more chaos that would result from the Wizarding world finding out that Harry Potter, The-Boy-Who-Lived, was married at age 8...im assuming he's eight, and im also assuming that you are going to have the two of them get married, as that is the direction in which this is going.
those things and the forshadowing is everywhere i turn! the love and family thing. when Arthur explained why and how Molly and him are family...and Harry and Ginny already admitted they loved each other...
i did find it a bit off that Harry so openly admitted that He loved her, and he did it first, as he never said those words before...but i can also understand since he is much younger and vulnerable...so he might be more open than say Harry Potter from Canon at age sixteen, who's heart is closed for the most part, who's gone through sixteen years without anyone ever telling him that they loved him...who had his first friend at age eleven...so yes, i can see how it is easier for him to say "I love you" without those extra three years of no love and no friends...
and including that Dumbledore part...that was just brilliant...showing how he messes up at times..and how truely clueless he can be...and yeah...i cant wait until the world finds out Harry is missing...
i wonder how the dursleys reacted...im sure they didnt shed any tears...id be floored if they did...but would they report it, would Petunia, knowing about Albus' "Last"? or whatever...would she report him missing given that she knows that there will be a very unhappy Headmaster on her hands?
and wouldn't dumbledore's wards detect apparition/disapparition? you'd think they would...but you never know
i love it so far, and really and truely look forward to the next chapter, so i hope you put the next one up soon...hopefulyl in a few days **eyes shining with hope** lol
i love it...cant wait to see where you go with it next....
~*NIWIS*~
No Idea Why I Smile posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 8:59am
i love it so far...i look forward to the next chapter soon...really soon, i hope...
i can sorta see where this is going, thinking back on Fate's Debt, and i went to look at "Luna's Hubby" and skimmed it, so i have a feeling as to the direction of this...and i like it...
i can only imagine Arthur's reaction...or Ginny's brothers...should be interesting..
I loved the Goblin part, showing his amusement at the stirring of the pot that will result when the Wizarding world finds out that their Hero is missing...i look forward to seeing where you take this...i cant wait to read more...seriously...please please please update soon!
i love it...
~*NIWIS*~
Erik Wiggins posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 5:30am
When are you going to get back to The Cracked Reservoir? I will read these two chapters and let you know what I think when I'm finished. I just wanted you to know I'm waiting for you to continue Reservoir!
Verahsa posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 3:22am
MoA:
I'm very intrigued by your story. I have to admit I was dreading where you were going with this story, as most times that I see a story of this nature it ends up being entirely non-innocent by the time Harry & Ginny are in the same room together, or get married within a day of being together, or get together as a romantic couple at 11. I'm very impressed with the way you're taking this so far.
I realize that in most of these stories a bonding of some nature (be it marriage or something much more involved, magically speaking), and wouldn't be surprised to see you go that way, but I appreciate that it hasn't turned instantly sappy less than a day from Harry's arrival.
So far, I'm also very pleased with the characterization you've given to both Harry & Ginny. Both seem to fall well under canon-expected behaviors given their current "altered" history in reference to canon. The characterizations of the other characters, what little we've seen of them, bodes well for the rest of the storyline. I sincerely look forward to seeing what else you end up writing in this storyline.
That's all for now, as it's still very early on all things considered. Keep writing, and thank you for your efforts, and for posting it for your fans to enjoy!
Sincerely,
Nicholas
Asad posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 2:44am
Very interesting. It's amusing me quite a bit that I know what to expect and what will probably happen in this fic from reading similar fics but I still can't help wait for the next update eagerly. Must be good work, for that to happen. :D
Sheepstamper posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 12:24am
ohh... i like it - keep going.....
HermioneGreen posted a comment on Friday 24th November 2006 12:21am
A most wonderful chapter. I can just see the turmoil in dumbledore's perfect little world that is going to spiral out of control once Ginny and Harry get married . . . I enjoyed this chapter immensley. Keep up the good work.
Thanks for sharing.
'Mione
Prince Charon posted a comment on Thursday 23rd November 2006 7:37pm
Very, very interesting.
I quite like your version of the Goblins.
More soon, please.
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 23rd November 2006 3:50pm
*Laughs* Oh, my, the goblins do have rather a sense of humor. Somehow I doubt strongly that Dumbledore or the Weaseley parents will find the whole situation quite as amusing. :D
*sigh* Dumbledore's making the same mistake so many modern intelligence agencies do, remote sensors are no substitute for eyeball reconnaisance and evaluation of something. Ah, well, it will come back to bite him, I'm sure.
Keep up the good work on this one.
ichtys posted a comment on Thursday 23rd November 2006 2:57pm
Great chapter. I really like the way you got the Goblins involved, very believable. I look forward to read the next chapter.
BTW, how long are you going to make this story? I would like to read what happends throughout the school-years.
Regards Ichtys
Musings of Apathy replied:
I plan for the story to go through the school years, although that is quite the undertaking. But I don't plan to abandon it short of the conclusion.
Thanks for the review.
Fate posted a comment on Thursday 23rd November 2006 1:56pm
Wonderful chapter!
Terry Swain posted a comment on Thursday 23rd November 2006 1:41pm
Great chapter. :)
EricThorsen posted a comment on Sunday 26th November 2006 6:32am